mauimoods
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posted on September 29, 2000 03:15:34 PM new
Just a poem I wrote. Be gentle as critics, k?
Words were said that stabbed deep
Both sides lost and we both weeped.
We go back a ways and I miss what we had
Dont know if its possible to forget the bad.
Perhaps it is, if we both do try
To remember the good and not let it die.
You meant alot to me and this I sincerely mean
If I could go back, It would be a bad dream.
If we cant forget, forgive and let it go
It was never ours, And that just isnt so.
What we had was something to keep
And Im hoping the hurt has not gone too deep.
I miss you alot and think of you each day
And hope that it can be mended in some way.
I think of the good and not dwell on the bad
But each day, part of me is still sad.
This isnt a push and this isnt a shove
It's letting you know the friendship was love.
Words were said between us two
I can forgive and hope you can too.
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stockticker
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posted on September 29, 2000 03:31:21 PM new
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mauimoods
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posted on September 29, 2000 03:33:00 PM new
***cringing*** because its the very first poem I ever wrote.
Thanks for the smile Irene
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plsmith
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posted on September 29, 2000 03:37:43 PM new
Good for you, Maui. I hope your friend reads this and wants to make amends...
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mybiddness
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posted on September 29, 2000 03:38:34 PM new
That's fabulous Maui So touching and I can tell it's really from your heart.
I hope all works out for you.
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mauimoods
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posted on September 29, 2000 03:40:24 PM new
edited to add that Pat, you and Diana have what we had. Time will tell. Everyone needs time.
[ edited by mauimoods on Sep 29, 2000 03:41 PM ]
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plsmith
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posted on September 29, 2000 03:50:04 PM new
Well then, heck, Maui, maybe all she needs is a good spanking 
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mauimoods
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posted on September 29, 2000 03:50:57 PM new
You do it Pat. She has a black belt. Nope, not gonna do it. Wanna live alittle longer
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enchanted
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posted on September 29, 2000 07:18:45 PM new
spanking? nope, not gonna spank a friend of Maui's. No way.
beautiful poem Maui
from the heart
Enchanted
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mauimoods
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posted on September 29, 2000 07:26:39 PM new
Thanks enchanted T'was my first one ever. Dont know nuttin' 'bout no poems...but it was something I wanted to do, so tis done. Thanks for being a nice critic
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enchanted
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posted on September 29, 2000 07:28:32 PM new
you're a natural maui and I hope your friend reads it once or twice and can open her/his heart
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kitsch1
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posted on September 29, 2000 07:42:16 PM new
Very nice poem maui
Good to flush stuff out that way isnt it.
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mauimoods
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posted on September 29, 2000 07:42:58 PM new
We'll see. Actually, I thought it (my attempt at poetry) could also fit for others who needed to say the same thing, ya know? Anyway, thanks enchanted
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mauimoods
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posted on September 29, 2000 07:44:05 PM new
Thanks Kel! Thats great hearing from you...youre a poet and Im pleased you liked it
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kitsch1
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posted on September 29, 2000 07:45:38 PM new
Ba! I'm a poet in my dreams, I'm pretty bad actually, but it don't stop me.
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kitsch1
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posted on September 29, 2000 07:45:40 PM new
Ba! I'm a poet in my dreams, I'm pretty bad actually, but it don't stop me.
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kitsch1
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posted on September 29, 2000 07:47:22 PM new
It needed to be said twice apparently
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mauimoods
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posted on September 29, 2000 07:48:59 PM new
HAHAHA...twice is good. I think
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kitsch1
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posted on September 29, 2000 07:50:21 PM new
twice is very good, four times; now thats to die for!
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mauimoods
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posted on September 29, 2000 07:50:53 PM new
Arent poems supposed to rhyme? Heck, how does one spell RHYM? Like I said, poet I am not. Now Diana is great...so is many folks who do it...but that always confused me...
edited to add one 'E'...still doesnt look right.
[ edited by mauimoods on Sep 29, 2000 07:51 PM ]
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kitsch1
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posted on September 29, 2000 07:55:23 PM new
They don't have to rhyme, they kinda have to have a beat or something. I dunno how to splain, I never studied poetry.
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rawbunzel
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posted on September 29, 2000 08:39:40 PM new
Very nice poem ,Maui. I hope it works for you. I do not like to see friends split up. Very sad.
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ShellyHerr
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posted on September 29, 2000 09:49:54 PM new
Maui
That was beautiful!
Poetry doesn't have to rhyme, when it doesn't, its called art
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kiheicat
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posted on September 29, 2000 10:03:26 PM new
REAL tears over here...
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dcj
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posted on September 30, 2000 04:17:53 AM new
Beautiful, Maui -
It's not the rhythm or meter that's most important, it's the depth with which you're able to convey your feeling using words.
Hang on to each other, you two...
D.
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toomanycomics
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posted on September 30, 2000 06:47:00 AM new
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donny
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posted on September 30, 2000 06:48:30 AM new
Late this morning, after I sleeped
I woked up, and here I peeped
And then did find, lo and beholdened
Poetry, and so, emboldened,
Decided to become a verser
Could be better, could be worser.
"Made up words!" a critic trounces.
But it all rhymes, and that's what countses.
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toomanycomics
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posted on September 30, 2000 06:53:52 AM new
'countses'? 
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enchanted
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posted on September 30, 2000 07:44:41 AM new
maui Mom wants to know if you and your friend are ok now
thanks
Mom
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OneZippyOne
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posted on September 30, 2000 08:12:49 AM new
A kind and gentle gesture maui. I do hope this is a step toward resolution for you both.
Of course poetry need not rhyme. I'd post some of my own, but it is often too dark. Pain fuels artistic expression like nothing else I've known, not even love.
Serendipity & Peace...
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